Sunday, November 27, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #14

Greetings once more, my sixy beasts! Something a bit different this week, from what I've been calling "the weird-ass work-in-progress." Not entirely sure what genre the thing even is. It's got a romance (a strange one) and explicit sex, but it's not romance or erotica… Anyhow, it's weird. Enjoy!

Amanda and I are fraternal twins, and our eggs were as different as scrambled and Fabergé. Amanda is perky, fair, pink-cheeked, with irises like gems cut out of the pure blue sky, whereas I’m thin and dark, with what my mother calls “gypsy eyes”, probably to try to make me feel mysterious or interesting. Hangover eyes, a bit squinty, their edges the color of a ripe bruise.

I was a deferring pregnancy, a wispy shadow hiding behind Amanda’s robust fetus that my parents didn’t even realize was a second daughter until nearly the third trimester. A uterine wallflower, that was me. Amanda burst forth screaming and vibrant, and I slipped quietly into the world behind her, never one to want a fuss made.

Thanks for swinging by, everyone! Now head here to check out all the other Six Sentence Sunday excerpts this week.
Posted by Meg Maguire at 12:00 AM
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33 comments:

  1. Vivien DeanNovember 27, 2011 at 1:01 AM

    Some great characterizations already set up to intrigue us. Great job!

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  2. AnonymousNovember 27, 2011 at 3:54 AM

    Love it. Great imagery!

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  3. E.D. WalkerNovember 27, 2011 at 4:12 AM

    Great voice in this. "a uterine wallflower" oh my! I totally LOLed.

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  4. RuthieNovember 27, 2011 at 4:50 AM

    Marvelous as ever, darling. "Hangover eyes" is very vivid -- is that new? :)

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  5. AnonymousNovember 27, 2011 at 7:29 AM

    I adores!

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  6. Stephanie QueenNovember 27, 2011 at 7:35 AM

    Love the language! As always, extremely well written. Interesting tone--not sure what to expect...

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  7. Jayel KayeNovember 27, 2011 at 7:54 AM

    loved that last line. what an interesting take on Fraternal twins

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  8. AlixNovember 27, 2011 at 8:11 AM

    Beautifully descriptive!

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  9. D CarneyNovember 27, 2011 at 9:11 AM

    Oh, wow. That was amazing. Well done!

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  10. AnonymousNovember 27, 2011 at 9:23 AM

    Great snippet, Cara! I can't wait to see what other snippets you share from this "weird-ass work in progress". LOL Doesn't sound weird to me at all! :)

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  11. Gemma ParkesNovember 27, 2011 at 9:26 AM

    Great description, love the way you describe differences between them!

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  12. Carrie Ann RyanNovember 27, 2011 at 9:32 AM

    Wow. Just amazingly eloquent words. Wallflower since conception. Love it.

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  13. Siobhan MuirNovember 27, 2011 at 10:34 AM

    It might be weird, but it's intriguing and I already get the sense of the sisters from her description of their entrance into the world. Well done six, Meg! :)

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  14. sueNovember 27, 2011 at 10:45 AM

    Love the egg distinction, cleaver, and wierd or not, got me hooked

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  15. Lex ValentineNovember 27, 2011 at 1:34 PM

    Love the egg line!

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  16. AnonymousNovember 27, 2011 at 2:19 PM

    Anything about twins intrigue me since I could have had them, but didn't. Love that you wrote this from their POV. Great job.

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  17. Taryn KincaidNovember 27, 2011 at 2:20 PM

    Great phrases! Love "uterine wallflower!" Excellent.

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  18. Brien MichaelsNovember 27, 2011 at 2:42 PM

    I've been itching to read from this. I love the speaker and her very reserved attitude. I can't wait to read more.

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  19. K.E. Saxon, AuthorNovember 27, 2011 at 3:46 PM

    I love your heroine already! Very nice. LOVE "uterine wallflower" Just says it all, doesn't it?

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  20. Sandra Renee PessoNovember 27, 2011 at 3:57 PM

    You have a gift for descriptive language. Sounds like an intriguing story. Wonderful six!

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  21. christine warnerNovember 27, 2011 at 4:07 PM

    I loved this...very intense and emotional. Love this phrase: our eggs were as different as scrambled and Fabergé.

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  22. Hailey EdwardsNovember 27, 2011 at 5:10 PM

    This sets the tone perfectly: "..our eggs were as different as scrambled and Fabergé." I hope you figure out whatever it is and get writing on it. ;)

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  23. Sarah GrimmNovember 27, 2011 at 5:38 PM

    I absolutely love this! Great job.

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  24. Gayle RamageNovember 27, 2011 at 5:40 PM

    I like the descriptions of the differences between the two. Fab snippet.

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  25. UnknownNovember 27, 2011 at 5:47 PM

    This is fantastic. The descriptions are so vivid I can see them--and that's rare when it comes to describing people for me.

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  26. Cari QuinnNovember 27, 2011 at 5:49 PM

    Oh man...another one I can't WAIT to read! Great six!

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  27. AnonymousNovember 27, 2011 at 6:58 PM

    I really loved the descriptions and the narrative voice.

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  28. Sue Ann BowlingNovember 27, 2011 at 7:05 PM

    Nice--but didn't the different sperm have any role?

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  29. Cherie MarksNovember 27, 2011 at 7:57 PM

    I love her and feel for her. Great character. Great six--such evocative imagery.

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  30. Jennifer WilckNovember 27, 2011 at 8:51 PM

    Okay, I LOVE this. The imagery and the descriptions are AWESOME.

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  31. Meg MaguireNovember 27, 2011 at 9:16 PM

    Thanks for stopping by, everyone! Your comments are always appreciated. I'm at that scary, insecure, and seemingly endless semi-final stretch stage with this book (about 75% done with the initial draft). Because of all your kind enthusiasm today, I'll go into this next week excited to get cracking on making this sucker fit for public consumption!

    xoxo, Meg

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  32. E. JamieNovember 27, 2011 at 10:21 PM

    Loved it!

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  33. WendyNovember 28, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    The details play well off each other. I really enjoyed this.

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